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My three graduate lab assistants were already in the Glass Room: Jason, Elaine, and Kathline. Kathline was the one who wasn’t Chinese. I was supposed to be teaching them something while they worked for me, but I had never been sure what. They in turn had decided I was unlikely to help their careers, and spent their time making the robot arms perform obscene gestures and shooting each other with cytoplasms. I only once saw them look at all interested in what I was doing, and that was when I was in Lab 4, tying my shirt around my stump, trying not to die.

There was an awkward silence. Elaine said bravely, “Welcome back.” Kathline nodded. Jason glanced at my pant leg, the one that hung off the edge of my office chair like a flat noodle, then away. I think he was angry at me for provoking this situation, the pressure to be sympathetic.

“Thank you.”

Silence descended again. Kathline shuffled her feet. Elaine cleared her throat. “If there’s anything we can do…”

“Oh,” I said. “There is.”

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Machine Man subscriber Alex (#237)

Location: London, England
Quote: "We're today's scrambled creatures, locked in tomorrow's double feature (Bowie)"
Posted: 5500 days ago

Nice lead up to the killer last line.

Machine Man subscriber Ian Manka (#3916)

Location: Los Angeles, California (school) | Akron, Ohio (home)
Quote: "Though I am not naturally honest, I am so sometimes by chance."
Posted: 5500 days ago

With each page, I learn a new word. Today's word of the day: Cytoplasm, "the protoplasm of a cell excluding the nucleus; is full of proteins that control cell metabolism."

I think an "I've Been Cytoplasm'd!" (a la Ghostbusters) T-shirt would be awesome. Or weird.

Machine Man subscriber Electrichead (#3898)

Location: Toronto
Posted: 5500 days ago

I feel so dirty for laughing at the description of the pant leg as a flat noodle. But I can't help it.

Machine Man subscriber Impotent Verse (#3907)

Location: Cambridge, UK
Quote: "On the internet, nobody knows you're a dog"
Posted: 5500 days ago

"He was angry at me for provoking this situation, this pressure to be sympathetic."

Sorry, sorry... but it jars a bit and I am not sure why. Maybe mixing present and past tense.

Should it be:
"He was angry at me for provoking this situation, the pressure to be sympathetic."

OMG! A serious comment!

Ajna (#3795)

Location: USA
Quote: "Judge if you want. We are all going to die one day. I intend to deserve it."
Posted: 5500 days ago

They can do something, sure... But what?

I vote, everything until they realize: "Oh crap, he's Iron Man.".

And then he kills them, 'cuz they P.O.'ed him.

Machine Man subscriber gstein42 (#585)

Location: 127.0.0.1
Quote: "That's not change! That's more of the same!"
Posted: 5500 days ago

"Shit." she thought, not even realizing what they were getting themselves into

Josh Bahr (#3129)

Location: Fishers, IN, USA
Quote: ""Yea, i said it...""
Posted: 5500 days ago

For some reason I keep comparing the company to Aperture Science from the XBox 360 game Portal... Ah good times

the-tine (#472)

Location: Pennsylvania, USA
Quote: "Coming soon to a planet near you."
Posted: 5500 days ago

"I only once saw them look at all interested in what I was doing, and that was when I was in Lab 4, tying my shirt around my stump, trying not to die."

Why isn't real amputation this funny?

Keep it up, Max!

Mary Rose (#2854)

Location: San Francisco, CA
Quote: "go big or stay home"
Posted: 5500 days ago

I'm with Alex--fantastic last line.

Abgrund (#3357)

Location: Atlantis
Quote: ""Redeem your mind from the hockshops of authority." - Ayn Rand"
Posted: 5499 days ago

It's funny how being a victim does, in fact, piss people off. Good observation.

Machine Man subscriber Max

Location: Melbourne, Australia
Quote: "I'm my number one fan!"
Posted: 5499 days ago

@Pev: OK, this is weird. I actually did tweak that line a few days ago, then forgot to sync up before it went live. I dunno if it's a tense problem, but I do slightly prefer "the pressure" to "this pressure," and an "I think" at the beginning. So now I'm syncing and it wants to put in the change. But if I do that, it's changing it after the fact, AND after you pointed it out, so it's noticeable. So should I manually change it back to the way I don't like?

I think I will let it sync, on the basis that it's not a big deal. Except that it makes your comment look weird. So for historical accuracy, it was:

"He was angry at me for provoking this situation, this pressure to be sympathetic."

And it's about to be:

"I think he was angry at me for provoking this situation, the pressure to be sympathetic."

Now get out of my head.

the-tine (#472)

Location: Pennsylvania, USA
Quote: "Coming soon to a planet near you."
Posted: 5499 days ago

I liked it the other way :( :( :(

De-sync-ify!

Abgrund (#3357)

Location: Atlantis
Quote: ""Redeem your mind from the hockshops of authority." - Ayn Rand"
Posted: 5499 days ago

So did I. More clear, more concise, more consistent. But I'm not writing it.

Machine Man subscriber Ben (#3924)

Location: Alberta, Canada
Quote: "I don't wanna ride the elevator."
Posted: 5497 days ago

Iv been reading this since it came out but I just wasnt feeling any moral superiority. Oh its hard wanting to comment and just not feeling moral enough. But now, I can, happily say... WTF lol I love this story.

Machine Man subscriber M.I.Minter (#347)

Location: Grand Rapids, Michigan, USA
Quote: "When I read about the evils of drinking, I gave up reading."
Posted: 5497 days ago

Doesn't this feel good?
Like the way your head feels after you stop hitting your self in the head with a hammer.
But still....GOOD!



Arancaytar (#2358)

Location: Frankfurt
Quote: "We are a way for the cosmos to know itself. -Sagan"
Posted: 5497 days ago

The sentence sounds leaner, meaner and stronger without the "I think".

Then again, you're the published author and not me. :P

Cecilieaux Bois de Murier (#4585)

Location: Washington, DC
Quote: "May a weird holy man make love to your towel rack."
Posted: 5268 days ago

Kathline? line? Not leen? Very annoying!

stanley becker (#5283)

Location: black hole
Quote: "DON"T JUDGE A BOOK BY ITS COVER!!"
Posted: 4786 days ago

Jason and Elaine are Chinese - could that mean something - for example "its a parable of Chinese ......... but to get back to the stump, [which has at least two meanings], its shaping up to be the hero of this yarn.

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