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Machine Man (serial)

Light. A strange kind of light. Diffuse. I couldn’t focus. I felt disorientated and stupid. I had forgotten where I was.

“Holding… that’s good. Keep that there.”

“A little interplay on the third core. Nothing serious.”

“Okay… let him have a look. But slowly.”

The light lifted. Or rather, the thing that had been draped over me was lifted, by a man in a striped shirt and bow tie. The thing was a lab coat. As it pulled back, the sleeve snagged and pulled me around in a half-circle until I was facing the steel gray box, the monitor. I tried to scream. Words streamed across the screen: NO BOX BOX I AM IN A BOX NN N L N OLALOLALOLALOLALOLALOLA

The lab coat flopped over me again, blocking my sight. “Reverse that! Reverse all that!”

“Taking him down.”

“Shit! You see that output?”

“Yeah.”

I felt myself shrinking, ceasing to exist in pieces.

“Maybe she’s right. Maybe…” Before I could hear the rest of this, I was gone.

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Machine Man subscriber fredzfrog (#2368)

Location: Moe
Quote: "Fredzfrog"
Posted: 6120 days ago

arrg! dang it! well played max.. love/hate this page.. could have been a friffhanger too :)

Machine Man subscriber Isaac (#4089)

Posted: 6120 days ago

I think every page since Wednesday (or Thursday, don't feel like paging back to check) could of been a friffhanger.

Machine Man subscriber Ian Manka (#3916)

Location: Los Angeles, California (school) | Akron, Ohio (home)
Quote: "Though I am not naturally honest, I am so sometimes by chance."
Posted: 6120 days ago

I didn't mention this on Friday's page, but I must say that I really liked the jump ahead in the timeline of the novel.

As for what "Charlie" (if that's what you can call him) looks like right now, am I alone in thinking that it looks like HAL 9000, with a cord connected to the monitor that is displaying his thoughts? I'm not entirely clear on the whole setup of "Charlie" in his current state, but I assume as soon as the lab assistants are done with the peek-a-boo shenanigans over the next few pages, "Charlie" (and subsequently, the reader) will gain a better understanding of what "he" looks like.

Anyways, love the way the third act is shaping up! (Or is it the epilogue? I really hope it isn't!)

Machine Man subscriber Max

Location: Melbourne, Australia
Quote: "I'm my number one fan!"
Posted: 6120 days ago

One page left!

:O

Machine Man subscriber regtiangha (#4080)

Location: Calgary, AB, CANADA
Quote: ""It tastes like beef!""
Posted: 6120 days ago

Nooooooo!

Machine Man subscriber Stuk (#4278)

Location: UK
Posted: 6120 days ago

ARghhhh!!! Noooo!

Machine Man subscriber Felix (#4236)

Location: NZ
Quote: "I'm naked underneath my clothes"
Posted: 6120 days ago

Two things:

1. By page do you mean chapter?

and 2. I hope that by page you mean chapter.

Machine Man subscriber Electrichead (#3898)

Location: Toronto
Posted: 6120 days ago

Was it just me that read LOLALOLALOLA as LOL LOL LOL like he was laughing hysterically?

And, just one page?! :(

Machine Man subscriber coolpillows (#3749)

Location: new york general sort of vicinity
Quote: ""It's not working" -- Joseph Clark"
Posted: 6120 days ago

NOOOO!!! You can't! Ending on a Tuesday? December 1st? Before winter solstice? Before my brother's 54th birthday?

For a second I thought, "Hey gang, let's pitch in to have Max write more! Another 3 bucks for 30 pp? If we keep paying, we can keep him writing." <Uh-oh, then Max will feel like "Machine Writer.">

Regardless, this highlights another _really_ stunning part of this experience: Not only do we not know how it will end, we don't know _when_ it will end. Until now..................

Machine Man subscriber Dave (#4576)

Location: UK
Quote: "Ever sift sand through a screen? ... We Bene Gesserit sift people to find the humans. (Reverend Mother Gaius Helen Mohiam, Dune) "
Posted: 6120 days ago

I was just getting to love the Format.

Max any plans for a new Serial Story???

And what happened to Lola and .......

I guess we will also finally find out what happens to the "Page not ready!
This Machine Man page doesn’t exist yet." page and the associated Comments.

Machine Man subscriber Warpig (#4534)

Location: Texas
Quote: "The key to war is not to die for your country, its to make the other poor dumb bastard die for his."
Posted: 6120 days ago

Just have everybody come out of their comas and do the robot dance. Just like a sappy 80s movie. Cool Pillows I hereby second the motion, we keep paying and he keeps writing. Weres my contours to kick him in the chest....

Machine Man subscriber Ted (#4023)

Location: Ohio, USA
Quote: "There is a guy in Lab Control who once killed a woman with his car, and he gets invited to parties. I don’t understand that."
Posted: 6120 days ago

I get what's going on, but I don't get it.
Charlie. Dude. You're freaking out. You're supposed to be the "Vulcan" one. I mean ok waking up to your state of existence being a computer, monitor, and webcam would freak anyone out. BUT you did make Lola kiss you. You should have expected anything, including this. Don't get all mad because you don't have the contours anymore.

Anyways: One page left? Awwwwwwwwwwwwwww... :(

Machine Man subscriber Yannick (#3858)

Location: Heist, Belgium
Quote: "he reads things"
Posted: 6120 days ago

well now you're just screwing with us!

Machine Man subscriber Alan W (#1427)

Location: Spokane, Washington
Quote: "Corgis are like potato chips"
Posted: 6120 days ago

Ok, so the question is, how does Charlie adapt to his new existence if they don't give him time to accept it?

Do they think they can just reprogram some things?

Is he remembering these experiences, I would guess that he is as he is the narrator. It's hard to have a narrator that didn't survive the story, well, I suppose American Beauty did that...

Maybe it's just one more page of the story, and then there will be an epilog, I like epilogs!

=)

Machine Man subscriber Toby O (#2900)

Location: Sydney
Quote: "vote with your wallet"
Posted: 6120 days ago

There's a ready made sequel here.. Machine Man II: Virtuosity.

Machine Man subscriber Bob (#4095)

Location: Kansas
Quote: "Freeze!!! This is the Government!!"
Posted: 6120 days ago

Alan brings up an excellent point. There could be an epilogue quite easily. Yeah you're thinking about that now huh? What a great idea that is and what you could do with it.

But seriously - ONE PAGE LEFT!? That is NOT a nice Christmas present!!!

I guess it had to end some time, but that's very little warning you've given us. What oh what will be on tomorrow's page? And then nothing. I will no longer have something to look forward to *every* -weekday- morning!

Machine Man subscriber David (#1456)

Location: Sydney, Australia
Quote: "Why are the pretty ones always insane?"
Posted: 6120 days ago

One page left of what? The whole shebang? Or just these peek-a-boo shenanigans before the next chapter in Charlie's mad adventure?

Writers, they're worse than bloody oracles.

Machine Man subscriber CrystalR (#4160)

Posted: 6120 days ago

Ghah, when Cassandra first suggested it, I'd hoped she wasn't serious. That's my every nightmare about cyborg life rolled up into one beige box.

This is why you have a living will!

/SO MANY SHUDDERS

Machine Man subscriber Justin (#3965)

Location: USA
Quote: "It has been my experience that certain men get ahead during the time that others waste. - Henry Ford"
Posted: 6120 days ago

Holy . . . *speechless*

I was loving the last page . . . I also thought that we were going to get an amazing third act. Max had thrown us a twist.

Only to realize that the book's over!

I can't allow a feeling of disappointment YET because I haven't read the "last" page, but . . .

Have you absolutely made up your mind about this, Max?

Machine Man subscriber Max

Location: Melbourne, Australia
Quote: "I'm my number one fan!"
Posted: 6119 days ago

I was tempted to put "EPILOGUE" above Page 182. Should I have done that? Because with this format you obviously get no feel for how much of the story is left.

Machine Man subscriber Max

Location: Melbourne, Australia
Quote: "I'm my number one fan!"
Posted: 6119 days ago

Btw, I started on a Wednesday, so finishing on a Tuesday makes it exactly 37 weeks!

Machine Man subscriber M.I.Minter (#347)

Location: Grand Rapids, Michigan, USA
Quote: "When I read about the evils of drinking, I gave up reading."
Posted: 6119 days ago

Epilogue:
Lola walks into a dark lab, flicks on the light and clicks the power button on the side of a video camera next to a monitor.
The monitor flashes "GOOD MORNING LOLA"
Lola says "good morning, are you ready for today's tests?"
monitor "YES"
Lola plugs a large powerful arm on a tripod into the side of the monitor. The Arm wigles its fingers one at a time.
Lola says, "very good, now rotate, I think we have the regulator problem fixed."
The hand rotates. The whole arm raises and flexes an enormous steel bicept, then makes a gun out of it's fingers and pretends to shoot.
The monitor reads BANG
Lola says "OK Carl, now let's try the legs."

Machine Man subscriber M.I.Minter (#347)

Location: Grand Rapids, Michigan, USA
Quote: "When I read about the evils of drinking, I gave up reading."
Posted: 6119 days ago

I loved all of this. I'm so excited to see what happens next and I'm overwhelmed that I could be a part of it.
Thanks for all you do Max. I hope my cheesy epilogue wasn't in poor taste...

Machine Man subscriber M.I.Minter (#347)

Location: Grand Rapids, Michigan, USA
Quote: "When I read about the evils of drinking, I gave up reading."
Posted: 6119 days ago

those last two comments were supposed to be on the last page.....crap

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