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Lola ran after me. My Contours took three more jerky steps, then Lola caught me and jumped onto my back. I felt her face bury itself in my neck, hot and wet. “I made you a heart,” I said. “It’s at Better Future.”

“Oh.” Her arms squeezed me. “That’s really sweet, Charlie.”

“The one you have won’t last. And I don’t think they’re going to give you a new one. But if you take us out, kill the van, and the cops and paramedics are already on their way—”

“I get it. Stop talking.”

Something clanged off my chest. I looked up to discover that while Lola and I had been talking, security guards had started running at me with guns. Or, more likely, running at Lola with guns. Cassandra Cautery screamed orders, gesturing. Jason bent over his device. It was probably not long before my gun-arm swept across my shoulders and removed both our heads.

“I’m glad I met you,” I said.

“Me, too,” she said. We kissed.

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Machine Man subscriber fredzfrog (#2368)

Location: Moe
Quote: "Fredzfrog"
Posted: 6126 days ago

is this a tuesiffhanger?
arrg! damn awesome page!! :( :p

Machine Man subscriber Justin (#3965)

Location: USA
Quote: "It has been my experience that certain men get ahead during the time that others waste. - Henry Ford"
Posted: 6126 days ago

Kissy, kissy!

Movie stuff for sure. =)

I can just see her in ripped up clothes and him all scratched up and bloody.

Machine Man subscriber Impotent Verse (#3907)

Location: Cambridge, UK
Quote: "On the internet, nobody knows you're a dog"
Posted: 6126 days ago

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


(sob)

Machine Man subscriber coolpillows (#3749)

Location: new york general sort of vicinity
Quote: ""It's not working" -- Joseph Clark"
Posted: 6126 days ago

Maybe I'm a bad reader, but I'm trying to put all this together.

Cass & Co. meet up with Charlie, Lola and Dead Carl in the rubble. At first, Jason's got some RC joystick that's going to make Charlie get in the van. Then Jason can't control him fast enough. Then through some magical, love-powered electro-magnetic pulse thing, Lola jumps on Charlie's back and Lola & Charlie are on the move.

This is a by-product of the page-a-day thing, but I feel like it's all happening in slo-o-o-w m-o-o-tion........

ACTION ACTION --- WE WANT ACTION!!

A - C - T !!! (clap clap clap)

I - O - N !!! (clap clap clap)

Machine Man subscriber Impotent Verse (#3907)

Location: Cambridge, UK
Quote: "On the internet, nobody knows you're a dog"
Posted: 6126 days ago

@Coolpillows: WTF?

Let me recap the plot.

Lola has an EMP emitting artificial heart. It was only designed for one pulse before recharge and she's gone two already. She's looking pale because the power supply in the heart is on it's last legs.

Charlie has worked out that Kissing with Lola sets off her heart's EMP pulse.

Charlie has lost nearly all his major organs and it is only the atomic powered body trunk that keeps him alive now.

When Charlie and Lola kiss, her heart will go Boom and they will both die... unless Max has a good plot twist (fingers crossed!). There's a new heart for Lola back at the Lab. Unless Charlie's parts is EMP hardened he's a gonner.





Machine Man subscriber Warpig (#4534)

Location: Texas
Quote: "The key to war is not to die for your country, its to make the other poor dumb bastard die for his."
Posted: 6126 days ago

I love the suspense of a page a day. My normal reading speed is more like a book a day. This slows it down and makes you think forwards and back in the book. Here is what I think is gonna happen. The EMP will go off, and Charlie will be the first to recover. The joystick wont work and he will be able to mobilize and leave.

Machine Man subscriber Toby O (#2900)

Location: Sydney
Quote: "vote with your wallet"
Posted: 6126 days ago

I think a twist would be really great about now...

Machine Man subscriber Toby O (#2900)

Location: Sydney
Quote: "vote with your wallet"
Posted: 6126 days ago

They're quite tasty
http://www.groceryzone.com.au/kelloggs-ktime-twist-strawberry-blueberry-200g-p-6789.html

Machine Man subscriber David (#1456)

Location: Sydney, Australia
Quote: "Why are the pretty ones always insane?"
Posted: 6126 days ago

Well, logic dictates that as the story is being told in the first person Charlie at least must survive this crisis somehow... Gun arm *not* gonna take off his head, but how will he avoid this fate and will the snuffler live to pursue him some more? (I mean, is the Pope a Catholic or what?)

I'm wondering though if our beloved author is thinking of killing off Lola - that'd be dark and confronting, but risks angering the fans who've bought into the idea that love conquers all and a good woman can fix any man no matter how broken he is emotionally and physically. It would also make the scriptwriter's job of turning the story into a mindless shoot 'em up with a happy slappy love story ending that little bit harder (which must be difficult to resist sometimes).

Machine Man subscriber CrystalR (#4160)

Posted: 6126 days ago

@David: There's always the newspaper clipping ending. Though I don't think that a company with as much pull as Better Future would let any word of this go to print.

Machine Man subscriber Max

Location: Melbourne, Australia
Quote: "I'm my number one fan!"
Posted: 6126 days ago

You know, I've never bought that idea that the protagonist needs to survive to write the story. Like there must be a way for him to make it to a typewriter and bang it all out before expiring. That seems weird to me. We don't poo-poo Tolkien because there's no way he could have actually seen those Hobbits make it to Mount Doom. I'm prepared to accept that a first-person story is giving me a pipeline into the protagonist's head, through some magical means, and leave it at that.

Not that this has anything to do with Charlie, of course. I'm just sayin'.

Machine Man subscriber Max

Location: Melbourne, Australia
Quote: "I'm my number one fan!"
Posted: 6126 days ago

@Pev: Format-breaker! I should probably fix that.

Machine Man subscriber Max

Location: Melbourne, Australia
Quote: "I'm my number one fan!"
Posted: 6126 days ago

Also: I do love being able to control the pacing via this medium. That's a definite plus. Not for YOU. For me.

Machine Man subscriber V (#3431)

Location: Melbourne, Australia
Quote: "It is a mockery of divine justice to believe that a saint and a sinner are on level terms from the moment they die"
Posted: 6126 days ago

Have just read the last twenty-one pages after a hiatus from my laptop... and after gorging myself on page after page of titilation, must now return to the doldrums of waiting for an email a day! Arh! When is this becoming a book?

Machine Man subscriber Chemical Rascal (#3964)

Location: Melbourne, Australia
Quote: "Don't read this. It's not relevant to anything. Go away."
Posted: 6126 days ago

Max, you aren't supposed to let the evil overlord side of you show until _after_ you've risen to power.

Silly.

Machine Man subscriber David (#1456)

Location: Sydney, Australia
Quote: "Why are the pretty ones always insane?"
Posted: 6124 days ago

So, having a protagonist get to a typewriter to tell all seems weird to you, but "...giving me a pipeline into the protagonist's head, through some magical means" doesn't? Writers. they're stranger than you thought. Thank God.

P.S. I usually imagine the first person narrative as being told to me in a pub by the dude, at least handwritten on scraps of paper, (or perhaps told to a smallish group at a house party, lots of wine and food, half naked women hangin' out by the pool to give me an alternative when the pace slows. You understand.) not typed up or anything that fancy. Unless we start admitting 'tales from heaven or hell' the dude's gotta be alive to tell the tale somehow!

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