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Carl was hiding in a downtown multi-level parking garage. That was according to my abdomen, which was telling me there was a block of ice millimeters away from my belly. There wasn’t. The ice was Carl. “We’re reading him very close,” squawked my Jason-speaker, and I thought: I have a remote sensor, thanks. I was going to have to figure out how to turn that off. In fact, as soon as this was over, I was going to shut down this whole remote connection thing. There would be a conversation.

But first: Carl. I peeled off the road, ran through the barricade, and pounded up the parking lot ramp. As I rounded the first level, the cold sensation intensified, and I began to feel uneasy. Because this was not a good environment for spotting Carl at a distance, not at all. He could be hiding between cars. Around a corner. Behind a stairwell door. I stopped. There was not much chance of surprising him, with the Contours firing locking pins into the concrete with each step. I shouted: “Lola!

My voice bounced into the darkness. I sucked in another breath.

Charlie!

I was running before I knew it. A family sedan began to back out in front of me, red brake lights steaming, and I knocked it aside with my gun-arm. I didn’t mean to hit it hard, but the Contours braced and the sedan bounced into the wall with a crunch. Then I rounded another corner and Carl was kneeling on the concrete, playing with his arms.

I stopped. I couldn’t see Lola. I didn’t know what Carl was doing. He had surely heard me. But he didn’t raise his head. He stayed hunched over, scraping at something. I reminded myself that Carl was crazy. I shouldn’t try to understand his behavior. I should just do this. I raised the gun-arm.

Although. Now he was right here, I didn’t know I could shoot him. Ask him where Lola is, I thought. Then I could shoot him. Or ignore him. Because what did I have against Carl? We’d had a difference opinion about whose parts were whose; we’d resolved it; it was done. He was basically a good guy, wasn’t he? Or had been, before the psychological trouble. Maybe I would let Carl be Better Future’s problem.

Then I noticed something. Carl’s posture was odd. He wasn’t just hunched. He was hunched over something. A kind of lump. A kind of sack. He was scraping away at—

Lola!” I screamed.

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Machine Man subscriber gstein42 (#585)

Location: 127.0.0.1
Quote: "That's not change! That's more of the same!"
Posted: 6152 days ago

oh right, that cold sensor thing.
i feel like this is a ridiculously long book... most long novels i can put away in a week, 2 tops. a month if it's long and i'm busy with other stuff.

but this one has gone on for 7 months, 12 days, or just shy of 33 weeks. (i also have no sense of how big a book this would be - at this point, i'm guessing somewhere around half-to-three-quarters of the way through a 150-181 page paperback? Max probably has a better idea)

Machine Man subscriber Electrichead (#3898)

Location: Toronto
Posted: 6152 days ago

Awesome friffhanger! The imminent showdown.

Machine Man subscriber Adam (#24)

Location: Morristown, Indiana
Quote: "Why do I blog? Simple, because Max Barry blogs."
Posted: 6152 days ago

I keep reading stuff about Charlie's abdomen, and it's got me thinking...

Question: How does Charlie eat now? Isn't his body mostly robot? and His abdomen seems like it has no stomach...

-adam

Machine Man subscriber SexCpotatoes (#2188)

Location: Navarre, Ohio
Quote: ""Democracy is the theory that the common man knows what he wants, and deserves to get it good and hard." - H. L. Mencken"
Posted: 6152 days ago

Adam- Intravenous Nutrition of course! You could slap a solid fuel block into a compartment in the Contours, and it could liquefy and feed it into your veins, etc.

Of course Carl is performing open heart surgery on Lola in a parking garage. I wonder if Carl grabbed the new heart Charlie was working on for Lola when he went into Better Future.

We shall see.

Machine Man subscriber Alan W (#1427)

Location: Spokane, Washington
Quote: "Corgis are like potato chips"
Posted: 6152 days ago

I hope this story goes on forever, or Max starts a new one when this one is over.

I'm like a serial junkie, need my next fix!

Machine Man subscriber Xdrngy (#4517)

Location: Massachusetts
Posted: 6151 days ago

ahhhh!!! I buy the feed because the free one ends with such a cliffhanger and this is what you leave me with?!!

Also I would really, reeeeaaaally like to see Better Future taken down (or at least learn a little more about the place), partially because it would be really disappointing if it just ended as one of those 'oh, I have the girl, everything's all right now' endings, but mostly because I don't want this book to end yet :)

Machine Man subscriber Max

Location: Melbourne, Australia
Quote: "I'm my number one fan!"
Posted: 6151 days ago

Yeah, we're coming up on an ending now, aren't we? Quick, somebody email me some ideas.

Our current count is 50,000 words. An average novel is in the vicinity of 70,000 (with doorstop novels 120k and beyond). So we are in shortish novel territory.

Also, I genuinely feel bad about leaving you with this for a whole weekend. But I am telling myself it's good for you.

Machine Man subscriber ellwood (#4245)

Location: New York
Quote: "Everbody has a plan until they get punched in the face."
Posted: 6150 days ago

So... In tragic novels, the good guy dies. In American movies the hero wins even when it doesn't make sense because we want a happy ending. In French movies we lose track of what's going on so the camera can follow a red baloon or a clown. In Italian movies the ugly guy always gets the girl. You know what yo need to do Max? Let's have less bang, bang, shoot 'em up and more diplomacy. That's right, diplomacy. You've spent a lot of time helping us understand the motivations behind the actions. So, don't take the easy road. Let the characters work there way out of this show down.

Machine Man subscriber Stygian Emperor (#2947)

Location: the Stygian Empire
Quote: "Flesh is a design flaw."
Posted: 6149 days ago

Are you nuts? He just got a GUN-ARM - He has to shoot someone! Maybe he can use it to take down Better Future (revealed in a dialog with Carl to be the shady source of all Charlie's woes) after he's done being "Diplomatic" or something.

Machine Man subscriber Alex (#237)

Location: London, England
Quote: "We're today's scrambled creatures, locked in tomorrow's double feature"
Posted: 6142 days ago

Well, possible ideas are: we could have the Carl/Lola back story, who does Lola choose, the taking down of Better Future, their other "projects" that could come up against Charlie, the possibility of Charlie helping Carl and them teaming up thus redeeming his previous "mis-judgement", the return of the "dead boss", Charlie coming up against his science team proteges (the ones that didn't like him) and any other number of random story lines that could keep this going for another few thousand words (I hope!) all with a bit of ironical Max humour thrown in?

:)

Machine Man subscriber Hyper (#4612)

Location: Texas, USA
Quote: ""A person who won't read has no advantage over one who can't read. " --Mark Twain"
Posted: 6111 days ago

My prediction: Carl stole Lola's old heart from Better Futures and is putting it back in.

Machine Man subscriber Missy (#4594)

Location: Oregon
Quote: "I love cake and champage!"
Posted: 5955 days ago

Hey, another edit here--I think I left another one back on pg 145 or something-- You're missing the word "of" I think. As in, "We've had a difference OF opinion ...".
Right?

Still loving it :)

Though, MAN, I feel so behind the times! As these comments are almost all over 150 days old.

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