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I waited in the Better Future lobby while Lola Banks had the inside of her mouth swabbed and answered questions in a harshly lit room about everyone she had ever met, everywhere she had ever been, and her Facebook profile. This took about forty minutes. Then she emerged, waved, and was escorted into the Dispassionate Waveform Sifter, which was like a metal detector for a very advanced definition of metal. As a side-benefit, it could also tell you if you had cancer. Usually this was a two-minute procedure, but when Lola stepped out she was re-buttoning her blouse and two hours had elapsed.

I clanked over to her. “What was that about?”

“Oh. Nothing. I always have trouble with metal detectors.” She pushed her glasses up her nose and smiled. “Tell me about your leg.”

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towr (#1914)

Location: Netherlands
Posted: 5054 days ago

"As a side-benefit, it could also tell you if you had cancer."
And if you didn't have it already, it would give it to you.

And in other news, Lola's name finally registered in my brain, so now I have the Copacabana tune stuck in my head. Just thought I'd mention it, so I might cause it to afflict other people.
"Her name was Lola, she was a showgirl.
..."

Machine Man subscriber gStein (#585)

Location: 127.0.0.1
Quote: "That's not change! That's more of the same!"
Posted: 5054 days ago

max, i love it when you leave these little "hooks" that seem irrelevant at the time, but usually come back later as important. (i guess you literary types call that foreshadowing?)

Machine Man subscriber Electrichead (#3898)

Location: Toronto
Posted: 5054 days ago

That Facebook profile gets ya every time.

Machine Man subscriber Jeff (#787)

Location: Berlin, Deutschland
Quote: "Give a man a match and he'll stay warm for the rest of the day; Set a man on fire and he'll stay warm for the rest of his life."
Posted: 5054 days ago

“Oh. Nothing. I always have trouble with metal detectors.” What? Why? Okay, this is killing me! This story is great but I need more than a paragraph/page a day. I can't wait to see where it goes. Great job!

Machine Man subscriber Impotent Verse (#3907)

Location: Cambridge, UK
Quote: "On the internet, nobody knows you're a dog"
Posted: 5054 days ago

two words: Body Piercings

Nah! It's going to be something more interesting, I hope.

Greg Karber (#1568)

Location: gregkarber.com
Posted: 5054 days ago

Robot?

Machine Man subscriber Ben (#3924)

Location: Alberta, Canada
Quote: "I don't wanna ride the elevator."
Posted: 5054 days ago

She probably wants to develop advanced prosthetics for personal reasons.

Tommy Mandel (#2554)

Location: nYc
Quote: ""Hah," she said."
Posted: 5054 days ago

My student, a very talented vocalist we shall call VP, of NY, said this, when I described this venture:
"My friend did that when she was writing a book, and it made you want more - the anticipation really did build up. - It makes the reader check the website, and could be a really good way to make money if it's a really good book."


Just sharing this with you. Now we gotta get back to rehearsing "Very Superstitious."

Machine Man subscriber M.I.Minter (#347)

Location: Grand Rapids, Michigan, USA
Quote: "When I read about the evils of drinking, I gave up reading."
Posted: 5054 days ago

foreshadowing!!!!!

Hot.

isn't
this
fun?

Katy (#2345)

Location: Los Angeles
Posted: 5053 days ago

Not to sound critical, but here's my criticism: this seems to be too choppy to me. I'm probably the only one feeling it, but the scenes seem to have become perhaps a tad bit too disconnected?

Oh, jeez. I'm such a jerk. I'm sorry, I should never have opened my mouth. I take it back. I take it all back. You go, Max. You go.

Machine Man subscriber Toby O (#2900)

Location: Sydney
Quote: "vote with your wallet"
Posted: 5053 days ago

Metal Detector: Metal detected!
Lola: What? Are you saying I'm fat?!?
MD: Uh.. no, I'm just saying there's extra metal where there should not be.
L: What do you mean by 'a little extra'?
MD: Based on my density scan--
L: Density?!?

==2 hours later==

MD: Please, I'm so sorry, just go! (sobs gently to itself)

stanley becker (#5283)

Location: black hole
Quote: "DON"T JUDGE A BOOK BY ITS COVER!!"
Posted: 4340 days ago

this Lola dame makes darn good conversation "Lets not talk about me - now tell me about your leg". She is like every barroom conversation anyone has ever had! Jeez Max have a heart.

Waadee (#5656)

Location: New Delhi
Quote: "Its better to regret something you did rather than something you did not"
Posted: 4152 days ago

Have you ever thought of why do we have a digestion system after all? all the living beings on planet earth depend on solar energy. there is a higher form of yoga in which the yogi becomes so independent that he doesn't needs to eat , drink or pee. The yogi only survives on sunlight. After all what ever we eat is a some sort of a chemical designed by nature to store solar energy.

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