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With my excess arm out of the way, I was able to clamp shut the artery. I’ll spare you the specifics. Let’s just say it was a temporary solution involving my fingers. I then spent the next forty minutes getting off the table. It took this long because I had to do everything with my mouth. First I pulled back the surgical cloth with my teeth. At this point I gained a better appreciation of why Better Future test subjects were having psychological problems. Because suddenly, despite everything I’d ever thought, I wanted to let go of my artery and die.

My body ended at the sternum. I couldn’t tell exactly where. I was wrapped in a flexible plastic-silicon bandage: above this was flesh and below was metal. The abdomen unit I’d inspected earlier was probably in there, but if so it was encased in silver-black titanium. Etched into the metal where my belly button should be was a circular design I recognized even upside down as a Better Future logo. My hips were multi-axis servo-magnetics. My legs were black Contour Threes.

I was going to vomit. Some part of me that had been silent a long time shrieked out a violent mental rejection: this should not be. I closed my eyes and thought about Lola.

I was weakening. I had to forget about who or what I was and concentrate on staying alive. That meant getting off this table. I forced myself to look again and eventually I spotted it: a thick plastic handle jutting out of my metal side that didn’t look like it belonged. What it looked like was a damper: a safety switch that prevented the abdomen from powering up.

I waited until I was sure I had no better options. Then I let go of my artery, grabbed at the handle, and pulled. It put up a fight, but I got it. Something clicked. I heard a high-pitched whine, and simultaneously a deep hum. I felt warmth. And I began to cry, because now I was going to live.

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Machine Man subscriber Impotent Verse (#3907)

Location: Cambridge, UK
Quote: "On the internet, nobody knows you're a dog"
Posted: 6173 days ago

I can't believe it is Friday already. Charlie has been on that operating table all week. Mind you, every tender cutting, blood-spurting, flesh rendering page has been worth it!

Machine Man subscriber Electrichead (#3898)

Location: Toronto
Posted: 6173 days ago

You've outdone yourself this week, Max!

Machine Man subscriber regtiangha (#4080)

Location: Calgary, AB, CANADA
Quote: ""It tastes like beef!""
Posted: 6173 days ago

Is Lola a Machine Woman now too?

Machine Man subscriber David (#1456)

Location: Sydney, Australia
Quote: "Why are the pretty ones always insane?"
Posted: 6173 days ago

I'm glad Charlie thinks he's going to live, not sure how with only his fingers holding his arteries closed and no way to attach a cyborg arm or anything. Not to mention the huge blood loss he's already suffered, the pain that's gotta hit sometime soon, and lots of other nasty stuff.

Oh well, I'll just trust that Max can guide Charlie through this scenario and get him out the other side in one, er several, pieces.

Machine Man subscriber tim (#3234)

Location: chattanooga, TN, USA
Quote: """
Posted: 6173 days ago

No matter how hard I try and I can't stop thinking about Robo cop. I believe this is a far greater story but my mind keeps jumping ahead in the plot where charlie ends up in a fight with that clay-mation 2 legged volkswagen in front of the bad guy's headquarters. I also keep thinking about Max Headroom... but all I can remember about him were pepsi commercials so I'm not sure there's a connection.

Machine Man subscriber Charles Thiesen (#3)

Location: Dorchester, MA
Quote: "Never put off till tomorrow what you can put off till the day after tomorrw."
Posted: 6173 days ago

Brilliant stuff, this latest thread. Unsettling Unflinching.

Machine Man subscriber Ian Manka (#3916)

Location: Los Angeles, California (school) | Akron, Ohio (home)
Quote: "Though I am not naturally honest, I am so sometimes by chance."
Posted: 6173 days ago

Fantastic week of pages, mirroring what others have said. What makes it more interesting is that you apparently have "broken your brain," according to your most recent blog post. Maybe you should break your brain more often. :p

My favorite line of this page is "And I began to cry, because now I was going to live." Maybe I'm interpreting this wrong, but I don't think Charlie isn't too happy that he's alive... tears of sadness. Charlie, as we've established from the beginning, isn't suicidal (yet), as he always sought perfection. He couldn't let himself fail by taking the easy way out.

Solid set of pages this week. Next the novel will shift in an UNEXPECTED DIRECTION when the genre suddenly changes to a Hardy Boys mystery (that is, a Hardy Boys mystery with tons of blood and gore), replete with "gee golly"s and "oh boy"s, about the disappearance of these people, and why the hell the surgery was interrupted.

Machine Man subscriber Alan W (#1427)

Location: Spokane, Washington
Quote: "Corgis are like potato chips"
Posted: 6173 days ago

Reading this page, I feel like there is a slight plot hole.

Normally, when I start an amputation, I would secure the arteries, THEN start cutting. Well, I would if I was some sort of a surgeon...

Charlie finds the saw within reaching distance (just barely), but does not spot any clamps.

@David: He doesn't need as much blood as he used to, he's only half wetware now. A lot of the blood he lost was coming from that machine, so he's probably not too bad off.

Just needs some juice and cookies!

Machine Man subscriber Alan W (#1427)

Location: Spokane, Washington
Quote: "Corgis are like potato chips"
Posted: 6173 days ago

PS: Fantastic week Max!

Machine Man subscriber SilverKnight (#2210)

Location: St. Louis
Posted: 6173 days ago

I AM FULLY PREPARED FOR THE EPICNESS THAT IS SURE TO FOLLOW THIS BUILD UP. It just seems so Michael Bay at this point: the world and everyone in it has gone to hell, but lo and behold one man and his traumatic robotic transformation still stand, if barely. Cue huge explosions and deafening sound effects, plus a corny, deep-throated line like "Let's do this." :D

I'm not even being sarcastic, I'm more pumped up now than I have been during this whole book. Let's do this!!!

Machine Man subscriber dabbeljuh (#4114)

Posted: 6173 days ago

best week.


"Maybe you should break your brain more often. :p" #2

:)

Machine Man subscriber Ben (#3924)

Location: Alberta, Canada
Quote: "I don't wanna ride the elevator."
Posted: 6173 days ago

Dear Lola,

We regret to inform you that your love interest has suffered biological damage. After deciding to reattach a modified version of his Contours and during the process the OR suffered significant damage and was ignited. All support staff on-site were severely injured or killed, making it impossible to render Charlie assistance. He was able to regain consciousness and surgically remove his own arm to begin his escape. He made an error during the process, however, and activated a PWR reactor, attached to his internal organ. The reactor had not been properly shielded and quickly began leaking gamma radiation in large quantity into his internal organs. He suffered incredible damage and DNA alteration.

It should be noted that due to the fire suppressant system the room was rather cold. While the radiation shielding was not complete, enough was in place that he likely felt warm and not burning hot in an otherwise frigid environment, probably dying in comfort.

Yours,
Better Future

Machine Man subscriber Joe M. (#3183)

Location: Texas
Quote: "Grooviness is essential"
Posted: 6173 days ago

I found this week to be rather weak, actually. Especially this page. Here's why: although this week's story has been necessary for a while, and although there have been many solid attempts at interesting characterization through this transitional period in the plot, none of it seemed believable. It doesn't seem believable because of what came before: this story has such a weight of ironic shallowness built up that any attempt (as here) at serious characterization, or an existential crisis that may actually *mean* something falls flat--simply put, it feels like it doesn't belong.

I suppose that this is the result of the peculiar serial format: these transitions would feel much more natural in a wholly-crafted book which could pay the kind of attention to structure and arc that this format can't handle.

For my money, the most horrific moments still came toward the beginning, where the loss of limbs hadn't become so blase. It's kind of hard to fix that now. I particularly loved (and I believe I commented on it at the time) the shock-reveal of his first mechanical hand. Perfectly cinematic moment.

I've written too much already, but I want to end on a positive note: I've offered some criticisms, but don't want to sound too critical--I'm still loving the story and looking forward to reading each day's installment.

Machine Man subscriber Ben (#3924)

Location: Alberta, Canada
Quote: "I don't wanna ride the elevator."
Posted: 6173 days ago

I agree to an extent with Joe, feeling somewhat like he must be dreaming now. As if the last while was all a dream and he will soon wake up sans one leg in a hospital, coming out of a shock inspired coma.

I am reading another book atm and in that book the charismatic leader of an empire is captured while on a vacation to allow his wife to heal from a severe injury. She goes on to lead his army in a huge war, and while exciting I stopped caring about her as much because the story started lacking cause to do so. The guy still had a magnetism though because who he was, his character was also in the action. Since the story bounced back and forth between them every few chapters, I was almost impatient for the army parts too end, despite the action, because I stopped caring about her. Her character had become bland. The man, while less overall action, was more real, and thus more interesting.

I am enjoying the parts the most, where charlie interacts with others, because those parts are more "alive". I think this is a difficult story too write, not just due to the serial format, but also because it is a diary of charlie. An autobiography.
This type of work, a diary or autobiography, is intended to be factual and non-fiction. Too change the style from its intended purpose without any loss is difficult, as is any translation. Like the book I am reading, and as Joe says, this part is seeming less magnetic than other parts. Its still entertaining but something is missing.

Machine Man subscriber Hyper (#4612)

Location: Texas, USA
Quote: ""A person who won't read has no advantage over one who can't read. " --Mark Twain"
Posted: 6111 days ago

I am really surprised that no one commented on the fact that his "member" is now officially gone...

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